Monday, November 21, 2016

Wp2


Explained Perceptions

Although domestic violence itself is a very broad topic, it’s also a very serious matter in today’s world. The first thought that typically comes to mind when discussing this topic is, why would that guy do such a thing. But what people sometimes don’t realize is that domestic actions/violence can come from both males and female. In fact, “according to a 2010 national survey by the Centers for Disease Control and Department of Justice, in the last 12 months more men than women were victims of intimate partner physical violence and over 40% of severe physical violence was directed at men”. No matter what the gender is this topic should be looked at very seriously. What the reader will soon see is how two writers with two different background speak on the same topic with two different perceptions.

            People share so many different opinions on this topic, but one in specific is a writer named Gina Loudon. Regarding the Ray Rice case, Gina states in her piece “Have You Thanked a Feminist for Your Abuse” If women are equal to men as feminist say they are then why didn’t they scream protest in Ray Rice’s punishment. She continues her argument by asking if women are in fact equal to men, then how can they(feminist) argue that a women beaten by her now husband deserves special protection. She’s arguing that since feminist {the advocacy of women’s right on the grounds of political, social, and economic equality to men} believe that women are equal to men then why should the wife that in this case the victim have special protection in not only this case, but period. She views this as feminist are being hypocrites. Although she believes a man should never lay his hand on a woman which, she could be a little bias saying that because it is coming from a woman. She also gives you both sides of the spectrum by including although one in four women will likely be assaulted by a partner in her lifetime, the numbers of men assaulted in relationships is estimated by some experts to be about equal to that of women. She believes that old-school feminist is more convincing or believable than this generation’s feminist. Gina touched on this very broad topic nicely by including her opinion but also stating some facts in there. She did receive some harsh comments that didn’t necessarily agree with her article. All in all, her purpose was to persuade to reader that feminist are hypocrites when addressing the Ray Rice case.

            A senior research analyst at People for the American Way named Brian Tashman, reacted to Gina’s article. He reacted on the article by writing an article of his own. Tashman starts the article off by citing where the other reader source is coming from and then states what Gina is arguing. Then he quickly discredits Loudon and says, “she does not have any evidence that feminist is somehow linked to abuse”. He also says, she believes no “intellectually honest” {means you make arguments you think are true, as opposed to making the arguments you are “supposed” to make and/or avoiding making arguments that you think are true that you aren't “supposed” to make} person could not disagree with her analysis. One thing these two writers do agree on is that feminist are very hypocritical. Brian’s purpose for this article is to point out to the reader that he agrees that feminist are hypocrites when it comes to domestic violence and in this case the Ray Rice case. What he does not agree with is Gina Loudon’s attempt to blame to blame all feminist for all domestic abuse, specifically the Ray Rice case. Both Brian Tashman and Gina Loudon’s ethos may be supported by their PHD etc. They both view this topic in two different ways and from two genders, which is actually the only way feminism should be discussed.

            Reading both of these articles gave me a lot of insite on feminism for one and also what effect feminist have on domestic violence. They used so many moves in both of these two articles. What these two articles may have done is touch some of the female’s viewers is a very uncomfortable way because they may feel less of a person. To reiterate what was said above feminism is the advocacy of women’s right on the grounds of political, social, and economic equality to men. Which means feminist who goal was to fight for women equality to men and in this situation (Ray Rice controversy) in some way puts them in a tough spot as women and for their image. As far as Brian’s view point I considered him as pro-feminist, refers to support of the cause of feminism without implying that the supporter is a member of the feminist movement. Because although he believed they were hypocrites, he also acknowledged that the whole feminism movement was courageous move by “old feminism”. (Brian) To conclude, although both parties that decised to tackle this argument had very insightful information to convinced the reader that on topic can be agreed or disagreed on as as long as evidence backs both arguments up.  

Monday, November 14, 2016

PB2a


                                   Name That “Move”
There are so many creative yet intelligent moves one uses when writing period. Every writing piece should have a purpose especially when it’s to persuade whoever the paper is intended for. In this student’s recommendation letter written by her teacher, the teacher uses her teaching experience when she explains how in her fifteen years of teaching the student she recommending is one of the best she has ever encountered. This move (citifying position) highlights to the reader that this teacher has a lot of experience and for two, in all her fifteen years as a teacher the student she is recommending must be special if she only mentioning this specific student as one of the best she’s come across. The writer goes into specifics on why the student (Stacy) sticks out so much by stating, “Stacy is a perceptive, sharp, quick individual with a high aptitude for math and science” {seeing that the program the student is trying to get into is engineering} this helps Stacy’s case even more because they play a big part in engineering. Another interesting move (personal level) the writer made was that she used the some of the student’s characteristics to scream out to the reader that not only would you be getting an educated student to your program but a great person as well. For example, the teacher states, “She's an active, outgoing presence in class with a great sense of humor”. She also includes “Stacy's the perfect person to get a group project rolling, but she also knows how to sit back and let others take the lead”. Just another way to stick-out to the reader even more.
What this recommendation also include is a move I would like to call an ongoing compliment. One should not expect anything less out of a recommendation letter. The sole purpose to pinpoint most or all of the good thing that specific person can bring to your university, organization, job and etc. In this case the writer precisely informed the intended reader about what the student can bring to their program while intelligently persuading the reader to accept the student into the program. One move I thought the writer could of included in this paper is a move an article called, “They Say, I Say” calls [Entertaining Objectives]. This would be courageous “move” by the writer because of the purpose of the writing but it would entertain, if you will how one may see the other side of the spectrum. I would like to say that after reading this recommendation letter I really persuaded that this student would be a great fit for an engineering program after reading what Stacy (the student) would be bringing to the table. Then again I’m not the intended reader that would be making the final decision on her acceptance am I? The teacher concluded he recommendation by stating the reader can reach out to her directly through via email if whomever reading had anything they would like to comment on. Now I would like to conclude that the moves the writer decided to make in this piece worked very well with what she was trying to get across to the reader.
             

Monday, November 7, 2016

thlog 1


This past essay I did for English 101-108 was a little challenging. With everything going on, as far as the septa strike it’s been little hard to concentrate on just my school work. But as far as this essay is concerned I had struggles staying on topic and giving relevant information that supports my topic. I have confidence in myself that I can be a very good writer as well as a reader by the end of this course. Zack’s feedback meant a lot to me because the things he advised me to work on I already beat myself up about. So that mean we’re both seeing my problems and seeing eye to eye. Also when I receive feedback from either y professor or my fellow peers it helps me tremendously. I also like that little activity we did in class when I paired up with two other students and we have to give our own opinion on one another’s papers. As we also discussed, and which is ver important is how on should critique one’s paper. I think the fact that most or all of our writing assignments are about writing and not and a specific question about an article or something of that sort is really different for me. It’s challenging yet it’s a challenge I willing to take on.

Something else that I wanted to mention about this course so far is the different way Zack teaches is really benefitting me how I look at reading and writing. For instance, when he used the little dolls to explain how one’s mind should think about reading and writing. I just thought that was a very useful yet unique way to break down writing specifically for me. All and all I’m not too proud of my performance thus far this course but I see things getting much better for me.